The best food in the world? There is nothing to think. Spaghetti is the most
wonderful food on the Earth, especially spaghetti with a tomato sauce. It taste
really awesome. It can get a good combination with every food you put on for
example sea food or meat ball. noodles are very munchy.
The reason I like the spaghetti is because I've eat it a lot with instant food.
Because of I can make good instant noodle soup, mostly I have to replace it into
the instant spaghetti. That is the reason I love the spaghetti most. There is also
another reason, when I had a travel in Europe, mostly in Italy. We departed Italy
very late and I was very tired. So we went to the nearly restaurant and we
ordered the pizza and spaghetti, which we think the most delicious and famous food
in Italy. Our choice was not wrong! It was the most delicious food I ever had. I
like eating, so I like most of the food, but after this story, spaghetti become my
most favorite food.
One of the good reason I like the spaghetti is that it gets a good harmony with
pizza too. Spaghetti become more tasty if comes with pizza. The cheese makes
both spaghetti and pizza better. But not all the pizza. I really hate pizza with
pepper. Pepper taste too strong. It hurts pizza's original taste. So I really hate
pizza with pepper.
by 200901051
ReplyDeleteSpaghetti seems your most favourite food. It'a s well written text that shows the reasons why you love spaghetti, but at the end of the text you start writing how you hate pizza with pepper. Maybe it's better if you remove it, because your text seems to be how much you love eating spaghetti and not how much you hate pizza with pepper.
What I like about this piece of writing is that it is written in a clear and confident way.
ReplyDeleteYour main point seems to be that a spaghetti is the best food in the world for you.
These particular words or lines struck me as powerful:
* Spaghetti is the most wonderful food on the Earth, especially spaghetti with a tomato sauce.
- I think the expression like ‘on the Earth’ is lively, and I like it.
* There is also another reason, … It was the most delicious food I ever had.
- It is very convincing that the good memory of the spaghetti is one of the reasons you like the food.
Some things aren’t clear to me. These lines or parts could be improved (meaning not clear, supporting points missing, order seems mixed up, writing not lively):
* It can get a good combination with every food you put on for example sea food or meat ball.
- I think punctuation is needed after the word ‘on’, and the letter ‘f’ of ‘for’ has to be capitalized.
* noodles are very munchy.
- The letter ‘n’ of the first one must be capitalized or a connective has to be used.
* I like eating, so I like most of the food, but
- This sentence and a word seem unnecessary to me.
The one change you could make that would make the biggest improvement in this piece of writing is changing the last paragraph into the text which is more related to the topic sentence and more suitable for its role- conclusion.
The best food in the world? There is nothing to think. Spaghetti is the most wonderful food on the Earth, especially spaghetti with a tomato sauce. It taste really awesome. It is the most wonderful combination in the food. It can get a good combination with every food you put on for example sea food or meat ball. If the spaghetti comes with seafood, it becomes more light. If the spaghetti comes with meatball, it gives more crunchy rather than in noodles. But noodles only are very munchy too.
ReplyDeleteBut the most reason I like the spaghetti is because I've eat it a lot with instant food. Because of I cannot make good instant noodle soup, mostly I have to replace it into the instant spaghetti. The instant spaghetti is too easy to make so I prefered the spaghetti. That is the reason I love the spaghetti most. There is also another reason, when I had a travel in Europe, mostly in Italy. We departed Italy very late and I was very tired. So we went to the nearly restaurant and we ordered the pizza and spaghetti, which we think the most delicious and famous food in Italy. Our choice was not wrong! It was the most delicious food I ever had. but after this story, spaghetti become my most favorite food. One of the good reason I like the spaghetti is that it gets a good harmony with pizza too. Spaghetti become more tasty if comes with pizza. The cheese makes both spaghetti and pizza better. But not all the pizza. I really hate pizza with pepper. Pepper taste too strong. It hurts pizza's original taste. So I really hate pizza with pepper.
So for these many reason, I like the spaghetti the most. From now on, I have tasted so many different food. But there were no food that is better than the spaghetti. So I can say one more time! The best food in the world is the spaghett