Milk Phobia
Introduction of Academic Writing
Friday 1-2
Prof. John Bahk-Halberg
200702742 HyeRi Lee
"You have to drink all of this milk, unless you cannot go back to your home." That was the sentence that teacher always said when I didn't drink the milk which I received from the elementary school. When I was an elementary school student, every student was forced to pay the money for the daily milk once a month, and had to drink them every day. It didn't matter that the students liked it or not. This was the crucial reason that I hate milk and dairy products.
When I was young, I didn't hate much drinking milk and eating dairy products. I was a really common kid who usually drank milk. Like other children, I liked flavored milk such as strawberry milk and chocolate milk. However, because of the pressure that I have to drink a white milk everyday in the school, I became to reject drinking milk more often. Finally, when I became a middle school student, I didn't have to drink milk in the school, so I stopped drinking milk after few years. After I enter the university, I knew that it is not good to have deviated food habit as an adult, so I tried to drink some milk but I failed it. That was because I could not bear the smell of it. Also, after I do not eat dairy products for some years, my stomach lost the ability to digest milk.
I still never drink white milk, but because of my effort I can eat strawberry flavored yogurt now. Of course I think the day I have to drink milk will come, but for now I really don't want to drink milk. Maybe this fact will not change until there is nothing to eat or drink in the world except for milk products. I will think about it again if that day comes.
I think your topic sentence very long, when i was reading your text i am very confuse, i need one more read your text, and you explain many way why you dont like milk good job, easier read about that and your conclusion also clear.
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ReplyDelete"You have to drink all of this milk, unless you cannot go back to your home." This one sentence became a critical reason that I don't like drinking milk until now. The teacher always said that when I didn't drink the milk which I received from the elementary school. When I was an elementary school student, every student was forced to pay the money for the daily milk once a month, and had to drink them every day. It didn't matter that the students liked it or not. This was the crucial reason that I hate milk and dairy products.
When I was young, I didn't hate drinking milk and eating dairy products. Like other children, I usually drank and liked flavored milk such as strawberry milk and chocolate milk. However, because of the pressure that I have to drink a white milk everyday in the school, I became to reject drinking milk. When I became a middle school student, I didn't have to drink milk in the school, so I finally stopped drinking milk. However, after the time I entered the university, I thought that it is not good to have deviated food habit as an adult. For that reason, I tried to drink some milk, but I failed it. I still could not bear the smell of it, and some fishy taste of it. Also, my stomach lost the ability to digest the milk products, because I did not eat dairy products for some years.
I still never drink milk even if it is flavored, but because of my effort I can eat strawberry flavored yogurt now. Of course I think someday it would be matter that I do not drink milk, but for now I really don't want to drink milk. Maybe it will be difficult to change this, and maybe I won't drink milk until there is nothing to eat or drink in the world except for milk products. I will think about it again if that day comes.
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ReplyDelete"You have to drink all of this milk, unless you cannot go back to your home." This one sentence was a critical reason that I became to hate drinking milk until now. The teacher always said that when I didn't drink the milk which I received from the elementary school. When I was an elementary school student, every student was forced to pay money for the daily milk once a month, and had to drink the milk every day. It didn't matter if the students liked it or not. This was the crucial reason that I hate milk and dairy products.
When I was young, I didn't hate drinking milk and could eat dairy products. Like other children, I usually drank and liked flavored milk such as strawberry milk and chocolate milk. However, because of the pressure that I have to drink a white milk everyday in the school, I rarely drank milk against it. When I became a middle school student, I didn't have to drink milk in the school, so I finally stopped drinking milk. However, after the time I entered the university, I thought that it is not good to have deviated food habit as an adult. For that reason, I tried to drink some milk, but I failed it. I still could not bear the smell of it, and some fishy taste of it. Also, because I did not eat dairy products for some years, my stomach cannot to digest the milk products now.
I still never drink milk even if it is flavored, but because of my effort I can eat strawberry flavored yogurt now. Of course I think someday it would be matter that I do not drink milk, but for now I really don't want to drink milk. Maybe it will be difficult to change this, and maybe I won't drink milk until there is nothing to eat or drink in the world except for milk products, although I know this is really big matter of me.