Almost everybody lived their some of the age as a student. So many of the people had met many type of teacher and because of there are so many of the teachers everyone have their best or worst teacher in their life. As a one of students, I also have my best teacher too. Youn Suk Nam, math teacher at my Jae Su academy was the most great teacher ever I met. Bald hair, high cheekbone, curved waist he doesn't look so hansome or reliable.
Last year, I was in the hopeless times. There was nothing I have to rely on. Every days was sorrowful and I lost the passion of the life. The academy was like a prison and everywhere is watched by CCTV. So many behaivors are restricted including using cellphone, PMP, and It was too awful life. I was almost at the last point to tolerate in their academy. At that time, he was not great teacher in my mind. He was just one of the teacher and in fact, he is not really a good teacher. But when I met him for asking the math problem, he said what I can never forgot anymore. "You look so honest that I can know it just looking at your face." Only just that word, I started to study again. I don't know he was saying just for cheer me up. But It made me the motive to study again. That winter, finally I successfully entered the H.U.F.S and now I living happy again.
I cannot remember him from that day. He's not teaching well. But anyway he helped many students mental health and I believed that so many student will be helped like me. But it was such a sad story that when I came back to the academy at this summer for meeting him again and wanted to say thank for him, he was dismissed by not teaching well and in now I don't know where he is now.
To SeJong From HyeRi ^,^
ReplyDeleteHi ^,^
What I liked about your essay was that you described the teacher's appearance at the first paragraph. It was easy to imagine you and your teacher's days. Your main point seems to be that the words from your teacher became a great motivation, so you could study hard. I think the sentence "I was in the hopeless time" was good because many students who studied for the entrance exam will agree with that. However, the sentence "There was nothing I have to rely on" was a little bit unclear to me. Maybe you'll be able to improve the sentence like "There was nothing I could rely on." Finally, The one change you could make that would make the biggest improvement in this piece of writing is correcting some grammatical errors, I guess.
In general, your essay was good to follow, and it was interesting that one sentence can change one's life.
Thanks ^,^
201002416 Lee Sejong
ReplyDeleteAlmost everybody had lived their some of the age as a student and because of these, many of the people would have met many type of teacher and because of there are so many of the teachers everyone have their best or worst teacher in their life. As a one of students, I also have my best teacher too. Youn Suk Nam, math teacher at my Jae-Su academy was the most great teacher ever I met. Bald hair, high cheekbone, curved waist he doesn't look so handsome or reliable. But, his eyes were always sparkling.
Last year, I was in the hopeless times. There was nothing I have to rely on. Every days was sorrowful and I lost the passion of the life. The academy was almost like a prison and everywhere is watched by CCTV. Sometime the overseer comes to watch the toilet too. So many behaviors are restricted including using mobile phone, PMP, and It was too awful life for me to tolerate. One day I decided to get out from the academy. At that time, he was not great teacher in my mind. He was just one of the teacher in the academy who just demand us to only study and in fact, he is not really a good teacher. But when I met him for asking the math problem, what he said is I can never forgot anymore. "You look so honest that I can know it just looking at your face. Only you have to is believing your self that you will succeed in the ending" Only just one saying, I started to study again. This time, I really did hard, doesn't matter how academy is strict or not. I don't know why he was saying that. It could be just for cheer me up. But It made me the motive to study again. That winter, finally I successfully entered the H.U.F.S. and now I living happily again.
I cannot remember him from that day. To tell the truth, he's not teaching well. But anyway he helped many students mental health and I strongly believe that so many student will be helped like me. But I was so sad that when I came back to the academy at this summer wanted to meet him again and to say thank you for him, he was dismissed by not teaching well and in now I don't know where he is now. But one day I really want to meet him and ask about why he said such a thing to me, probably I think he won't remember.