Introduction to Academic Writing 2
Jeon Yejin/ 201003023
Have you ever pretended to be sick? There are some cases that people normally pretend to be sick such as right before taking a teat, answering for a failure. Going to a dentist is one of these common cases to make people pretend to be ill. I also experience this whenever I have to go to the dentist. Unfortunately I had to get in the state once again last month. I was planning to straighten irregular teeth, and it needs for me to pull out four of my teeth which were with no problem.
When I was arriving at the center, I could see people waiting for their turn to recieve a treatment. I joined with them. Few minutes after then, I was guided to a seat. A nurse was writing something to a chart while asking me some questions. Then she checked my teeth briefly, and when she finished a doctor came. He started to extract my teeth. I had been put under anesthesia, but it was painful no matter how strong I had been put under it. After the surgery, I could not feel anything by my mouth. It's all under anesthesia. So I didn't know there were clots of blood in my mouth. When I was washing my mouth, a lot of clotted bloods were pouring out. It was disgusting. I felt dizzy. One of the nurses near me was talking to me about some advices for my teeth, but I could not concentrate on it. I was worried about all the bloods I poured out. Like magic, however, next day I could not feel any pain about it. It was just like before I pull out the teeth except there were nothing in their places. Also I now can see the set of teeth are changing in a good way.
After the experience where I watched that what made me painful when I removed it could make me better with mo pain once after I removed it, I realized an important thing. It was that removement of something might be painful but if it is essential, it would not be hurt that much as I pass the time of removement and could even make me in better condition. Though I would not be able to avoid being nervous again the next time of going to the dentist's, I would not give up to go, if it is essential.
Lesson from a Day of pulling out Teeth
ReplyDeleteHave you ever pretended to be sick? There are some cases that people normally pretend to be sick such as right before taking a test, being required to answer for a failure. Going to a dentist is one of these common cases to make people pretend to be ill. I experience this whenever I have to go to the dentist too. Unfortunately I had to get in this state once again last month. I was planning to straighten irregular teeth, and it needs for me to pull out four of my teeth which were with no problem.
When I was arriving at the center, I could see people waiting for their turn to recieve a treatment. I joined with them. Few minutes after then, I was guided to a seat. A nurse was writing something to a chart while asking me some questions. Then she checked my teeth briefly, and when she finished a doctor came. He started to extract my teeth. I had been put under anesthesia, but it was painful no matter how strong I had been put under it. After the surgery, I had no feeling in my mouth. All parts of my mouth were under anesthesia. So I didn't know there were clots of blood in my mouth. When I was washing my mouth, a lot of clotted bloods were pouring out. It was disgusting. I felt dizzy. One of the nurses near me was talking to me about some advices for my teeth, but I could not concentrate on it. I was worried about all the bloods I poured out. Like magic, however, next day I could not feel any pain about it. It was just like before I pull out the teeth except there were nothing in their places. Also I now can see the set of my teeth is changing in a good way.
In this experience, I watched that what made me painful when I removed it could make me better with mo pain once after I removed it. I learned that removement of something might be painful but if it is essential, it would not be hurt that much as I pass the time of removement. Also it could even make me in better condition. I would not be able to stop being nervous again when I would have to go to the dentist's next time. I would not give up to go, however, if it is essential.
From HyeRi
ReplyDeleteWhat I like about this piece of writing is that you described what you felt at that time well. I could easily know how it may felt.
Your main point seems to be "removement of something might be painful but essential for the better condition."
The "A lot of clotted bloods were pouring out" strucked me.
There was not clear things to read, and I think this piece of essay is really well-organized.
Generally, your essay is really good^,^