December is a very meaningful month for most people. Why? The main reason would be the Christmas. Also, December is at the center of winter and many people like to see a white village covered with snow. Unfortunately December is the worst time for some people which even let them to try to kill themselves. In Korea, there has been astounding news about the suicide of high school students or graduates who took the College Scholastic Ability Test (CSAT) before about a month ago from then. What makes them to decide to suicide after they finally finish the test? Well, there is just one reason that most of Koreans could understand. They were depressed by their grades in CSAT. (It does not mean that it can be justified, though.) Like this, high school students in Korea get a lot of stress from the results of their studies and one of the factors that make this worse is the expectation, pressure from their parents and teachers. I was one of them too. However, I could pass the days very positively by lots of people near me. In this essay, I want to write the experience about one of them, the class teacher of my second grade in high school who planted the belief in myself in my mind.
When I was in my high school days, I was very nervous about my future. Though I have been finding out making a goal is about how I think about myself, I couldn't believe myself strongly then and also couldn't stop being nervous unless I made sure that all things are ready. However, one day of the days when I was in second grade, the class teacher told me to stay in class after school. I became worried because I thought he might scold me for blowing up the midterm. I waited the teacher for a while in the class alone. Finally he came. I was very nervous. However, the next few hours were totally different from what I thought about and even gave me the power to go on until the end of the high school days. He asked me about my dream. I answered. He asked some more questions why I did not feel so good. I answered again that I was worried about my future. Then he said nothing but a sentence that I can make it. And I will make it. I couldn't answer about this because I started to cry after then. I was shocked because nobody took my words so seriously and sincerely as he did. After I calmed down, he gave me some advice for the ways to make my goal. When I stood up to go home, he added that he was in a great hopes that I would come back to school becoming a great person who I wanted to be. He said to me like this in every moment whenever we happened to meet after then.
There are a lot of people, who I have deeply appreciated. Still, I think I could not come over all the negative thoughts I had in my high school days without the class teacher in my second grade. His words made me much stronger in my mind. I often go to my high school and talk with him. He does not stop to say those powerful words to me. I thank God for letting me become one of the students of such a good teacher.
1. What I like about this piece of writing is your introduction. When I read the first sentence, I did not expect what you wanted to say. You just mentioned happy thing first, but topic became totally different. I like this kind of reversal.
ReplyDelete2. Your main point seems to be your class teacher of your sencond grade in hight school who encouraged you to believe yourself.
3. The last sentence, 'I thank God for letting me become one of the studnets of such a good tacher' line struck me as powerful, because I can feel how much you appreciate what your teacher did for you.
4. I wanted to know what exactly your teacher said to you. it will be good if you add more details about that.
The main point of this essay is about your teacher who helped you to encourage your days preparing for CSAT.
ReplyDeleteI was impressed to your hook in the introduction part. It really hooks me. I cannot expect what you want to say. The only thing to do is focusing on your essay carefully.
And You describe your feeling when you were waiting for your teacher. I felt the feeling that you had while reading this essay.
But, some sentenses is little bit difficult to me. The second sentense of the paragragh is too long to understand. I think it is better to divide it into two pieces.
Anyway your writing is interesting and impressive.
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ReplyDeleteDecember is a very meaningful month for most people. Why? The main reason would be the Christmas. Also, December is at the center of winter and many people like to see a white village covered with snow. Unfortunately December is the worst time for some people which even let them to try to kill themselves. In Korea, there has been astounding news about the suicide of high school students or graduates who took the College Scholastic Ability Test (CSAT) before about a month ago from then. What makes them to decide to suicide after they finally finish the test? Well, there is just one reason that most of Koreans could understand. They were depressed by their grades in CSAT. (It does not mean that it can be justified, though.) Like this, high school students in Korea get a lot of stress from the results of their studies and one of the factors that make this worse is the expectation, pressure from their parents and teachers. I was one of them too. However, I could pass the days very positively by lots of people near me. In this essay, I want to write the experience about one of them, the class teacher of my second grade in high school who planted the belief in myself in my mind.
When I was in my high school days, I was very nervous about my future. I couldn't believe myself strongly then so I couldn't stop being worried about experiencing failure. I knew what I want to be and to do in my whole life, but was not sure I would do well in the area. I did not want to regret in the future the road I would take probably because I would know I can’t be the best in the area. I thought if I failed to take a suitable road for me, it would be the end for my life. I didn’t try to follow what I want to do and even neglect it. Most of the people near me told me just that the road is too dangerous. However, all that changed one day when the class teacher told me to stay in class after school in my second grade of high school. I worried because I thought he might scold me for blowing up the midterm. I waited the teacher for a while in the class alone. Finally he came. I was very nervous. However, the next few hours were totally different from what I thought about and even gave me the power to go on until the end of the high school days. He asked me about my dream. I answered. He asked some more questions what I exactly want to do by achieving the dream. I answered again.
“Do it!”
He told me.
“You will make it, I’m sure.”
I couldn't answer about this because I started to cry after then. Though I could not answer him, I could hear what he continued to talk about of how I would make the goals for my dream seriously. I was shocked because nobody took my words so seriously and sincerely as he did. After I calmed down, he gave me some more advice about economic, working environment and so on of the jobs I might have. When I stood up to go home, he added that he was in a great hope that I would come back to school becoming a great person who I wanted to be. He told me that I have to be prepared to the failures I would make but should not give up because I have the talent for it. He asked me how I was doing for make the dream come true whenever we happened to meet after then. It was very helpful to me because I can realize it’s not about ‘Can I do it?’ but about ‘How can I make it?’ After the talks with him, I could think more realistically about my future.
There are a lot of people, who I have deeply appreciated. Still, I think I could not come over all the negative thoughts I had in my high school days without the class teacher in my second grade. His words made me much stronger in my mind. I often go to my high school and talk with him. He does not stop to say those powerful words to me. I thank God for letting me become one of the students of such a good teacher.