Discount? Enuri!
Suppose you buy apples for 3,000 won, bananas for 3,000 won and oranges for 5,000 won. A Canadian fruit seller prices them at 11,000 won. A Chinese fruit seller prices them at 11,000 won as well. However, a Korean fruit seller may sell them to you for 10,000 won. The reason is "Enuri" Enuri, which is similar to a special discount, is one of unique cultural traditions in Korea.
People in Korea feel a deep affection between people through Enuri. For examples, when you go to the Korean traditional markets, you will find a seller and a customer talking so loudly. Don't misunderstand that they raise their voice. Maybe they are just doing Enuri. The customer asks the seller to give discount or throw in a few more. Enuri, which is a pure Korean word, means that sellers can give customers a discount or more goods at their discretion. But there is one big difference between discount and Enuri. Through Enuri, you can buy a product below its production price. Although sellers make a loss for the first time, they get regular customers, because they go to the same store with thanks for Enuri. In addition to the commercial reason, sellers who offer Enuri care not only themselves but also their customers. Koreans have a strong sense of solidarity and they hope to be wealthy all together. Therefore, people share what they have with others in order to help each other.
Nowadays, Instead of the Korean traditional markets, websites where people sell and buy with Enuri are popping up. Still, Enuri spirit has disappeared gradually. In a hard-hearted modern society, Enuri can remind people of love and affection.
Yejin Jeon
ReplyDelete1. What I like about this piece of writing is that it's talking about Enuri;> Also, I think the hook in this writing is very attractive.
2. Your main point seems to be one of the traditions in Korea which shows lots of affection in it, Enuri.
3. These particular words or lines struck me as powerful:
* But there is one big difference between discount and Enuri.
-I think this sentence is just in the right moment when the reader would be curious about the difference of discount and Enuri.
* Don't misunderstand that they raise their voice.
-This is the sentence which, I think, would make the reader to keep concentrating on this writing.
4. Some things aren’t clear to me. These lines or parts could be improved (meaning not clear, supporting points missing, order seems mixed up, writing not lively):
* A Chinese fruit seller prices them at 11,000 won as well. However, a Korean fruit seller may sell them to you for 10,000 won.
-I was little confused of this sentence because I thought there is something like Enuri in China. Of course... it might be very different from it, as you explained at the middle of the writing, but I think other examples would be more effective in emphasizing the topic.
5. The one change you could make that would make the biggest improvement in this piece of writing is to add more explanation on the conclusion.
1. What I like about this piece of writing is that it's about the unique style of koreans in buying something.
ReplyDelete2. Your main point seems to be the Enuri, that is a special discount only appeared in korea.
3. I think the first paragraph struck me as powerful. It is quite interesting enough to concentrate on your writing.