My Teacher, My Dream Keeper
"I am really, really want to see movie director Jang Jun Hwa someday and I am sure that I can"
This is what she said to me in her last class. My Korean teacher was in hospital, so she taught Korean in place of the sick teacher for a while. It was when I was in the second grade of the high school. She had never forced me to study and always advised me not to give up my dream. She is not only the best teacher I have ever met, but also my dream keeper.
In order to talk about her, first of all, I need to talk about myself at the age of 18. I used to rebel against all my teachers. I went to school two or three times a week. Even though I was at school, I stayed at school infirmary or rooftop, listening to music. Of course, I was not interested in studying at all. I just wanted to study film and photography. I thought that it was useless for me to live out my dream to study languages, math, science and to enter university after taking the college entrance examination, which is a so-called "Korean style study" All teachers who knew I hoped to study film did not understand me and even laughed at my future goal. Some teachers said, "Are you truly hoping to be a movie director?" "I know that you will give up your dream soon. You are not going to earn money. It is a totally unfeasible dream. Why don't you study hard to go to a prestigious university?" However, the short-term Korean teacher did not talk to me in an unpleasant way. Unlike other teaches, she always stressed the importance of determined goals from her first class to the end. She taught us that it was important both studying hard and thinking about what we wanted to be. Since then, I thought that she was different from other teachers. Although she was not a close teacher, I was sure that she would understand what I want to be. One day, I told my homeroom teacher that I decided to stop the high school and to go to America to study film. All teachers persuaded me to graduate high school first. Still, I did not change my mind. I had the belief that I will be a successful movie director after studying film school in America even if I do not have high school diploma. After hearing that I wanted to quit the school, she called me over to talk together. I expected that she were going to persuade me to keep studying in high school and talk about a need for university and how useless my plan and dream were. Unexpectedly, she wanted to listen to me before talking to me. I told her my idea that studying in high school was unimportant to make a good film and my plan that I was going to study English first for two years and then, enter film school. After that, she said, "Your plan can be good. I think in America you will learn more advanced skills. I believe that you will be one of the best film directors, because you are very eager to make film." She stared at me, "However, I think people who can not do what they have to do now can never do what they want to do. What do you think?" I was really shocked, because I did not expect that nobody told me in that way. She hit the nail on the head.
Because of her, I did not leave school and now I study English in university. In addition, I have never regretted that I did not quite high school. I do not give up my dream. I just change the way of being a film director a little bit. From her, I learned that I looked to the future with a more long-term view. I really appreciate her advice and I want to call her "my dream keeper"
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ReplyDeleteYour writing is about a teacher who supported you to follow your dream.
First of all, you might want to change "my Korean teacher" into my "Korean language teacher" or into something similar, because if a foreigner would read it, he or she would presume that you are talking about a Korean person who is a teacher and not a Korean language teacher.
In general the text is easy to understand and clear what the message of your writing should be. However, there are plenty of I's in your text. To me, it makes it feel that you are more writing about you, then about your "Dream Keeper". Maybe you could write more about her, so the reader could learn more about your teacher.
I did like that you wrote about the other teachers who tried to convince you that studying to become a film director is bad and about your dream teacher who tried to support you. It gives a contrast, so the reader can clearly understand that she was your dream teacher.
1. What I like about this piece of writing is the quotation you used. It came to me quite interesting.
ReplyDelete2. Your main point seems to be the teacher who taught Korean in place of the sick teacher for a while when you was 18.
3. "I am really, really want to see movie director Jang Jun Hwa someday and I am sure that I can" struck me as powerful. It is pretty interesting hook, I think.
My Teacher, My Dream Keeper (second draft)
ReplyDelete"I am looking forward to seeing movie director Jang Jun Hwa someday and I am sure that I can" This is what she said to me in her last class. At the first time I saw her, she had trimmed long wavy hair and wore classy clothes. Also, she spoke in a Seoul accent. For these reason, she looked like high-ranking government official. However, she was not a stuffed shirt. She was a good listener and wanted to be our friend. She taught us only for 3 months, because she was a teacher covering for my Korean literature teacher who got injured. Even though she spent a short time in my school, she is not only the best teacher I have ever met but also my dream keeper.
When I was 18, I was interested in film and photography rather than study for the college entrance exam. I thought that studying languages, math and science were useless to live out my dream, which is to become a movie director. All teachers did not understand me and even laughed at my future goal. Some teachers said, "Are you truly hoping to be a movie director?", "I know that you will give up your dream soon. You are not going to earn money. It is a totally unfeasible dream. Why don't you study hard to go to a prestigious university?" However, she never told me in such a manner. Unlike other teaches, she stressed the importance of setting determined goals all the time. I thought that she was different from other teachers. I was sure that she would appreciate how I think about my future, even if she did not know me well. One day, I told my homeroom teacher that I decided to stop the high school to study film. All teachers persuaded me to graduate high school first. After hearing I wanted to quit the school, she called me over to talk together. I expected she were going to persuade me to keep studying in high school and talk about a need for university and how useless my plan and dream were. Unexpectedly, she wanted to listen to me first. And then, she said, “I believe that you will be one of the best film directors, because you are very eager to make film." She stared at me, "However, if people can not do what they have to do now, I think they can never do what they want to do. What do you think?" I was really shocked, because I did not expect that nobody told me in that way. She hit the nail on the head.
Because of her advice, I did not leave school and have never regretted my decision. Nevertheless, I do not give up my dream until now. I simply change the way of being a film director. She taught me how to look to the future with a long-term view. I really appreciate her advice and I want to call her "my dream keeper"