| Opinion essay about invention(1)
Which invention do you think causes a great change into people's lives? Some people might answer a computer is the most important invention, because it makes us solve many difficult problems in one or two second. Others might choose KTX, Korean Train Express, because of its role to load things and carry people in a short time. If I have a chance to reply the question, I would pick out a cell phone which has many functions as well as connect among people that I miss so much. The machine has affected lives of people, including me since it is introduced. A cell phone makes me live so conveniently, because it helps me to make an appointment easy. I can talk to my family who live far away from me more than once a week through the machine. I am even able to send text messages to my friends whom I so much miss. Not only connecting me and my valued people, it offers various functions. It wakes me up every morning at 7.am and informs me what time it is. It lets me know how much time it will take to go somewhere I don't know exactly. Sometimes I write lots of information in my cell phone like notebook. Some people argue that it irritates most people lives, because it interrupts normal lives of people. For example, when people concentrate on their really important missions or assignments, calling or text message disturb their nerves to indulge in. I know it is very annoyed situation. However cell phone can be turned off or be put in vibrate mode whenever you want, it cannot be a problem. Also, cell phone has numerous useful functions to cover its trivial nuisances. A cell phone is very convenient and useful machine that affects people's lives. It makes us contact to others easily and offers lots of functions which are necessary in our ordinary lives. I think it is desirable to be called as palm-size computer, if it has little deficiency. Therefore, I think a cell phone is the most essential and important invention that cause affection not only me, but also the people who have one.
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Tuesday, November 2, 2010
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ReplyDeleteIt's a good writing with plenty of background information that focuses around the cellphone. Your message is that the cellphone is a great invention to you.
I like your refutation because it makes your message that the cellphone is a great invention even more trustworthy.
On the other hand, I feel that instead of putting the second paragraph in the I-form, you might want to put it in the people's perspective form. Because it might have a stronger impact on the reader that the cellphone is not only you important, but also for other people.
It was very interesting story, but I just think that your hook was not much interesting. I just wonder how about remove the KTX and computer and just start with cellphone. I know that these two are going to emphasize the importance of the cell phone but, I think it was not that good idea. Also it was four paragraph, which we have to do was three paragrpah. But except those two, rest are great. It was very interesting and I also agee that cell phone is the best machine that changed our life.
ReplyDeleteWhich invention do you think causes a great change into people’s lives? Some people might answer a computer is the most important invention, because it makes us solve many difficult problems in one or two second. Others might choose KTX, Korean Train Express, because of its role to load things and carry people in a short time. If I have a chance to reply the question, I would pick out a cell phone which has many functions as well as connect among people that I miss so much. The machine has affected lives of people, including me since it is introduced, because most people have these machines and they use all day long whenever they grab it.
ReplyDeleteA cell phone makes users live so conveniently, because it helps them to make an appointment easy. People can talk to their family who live far away from them more than once a week through the machine. They are even able to send text messages to their friends whom they so much miss. Not only connecting them and their valued people, it offers various functions. It wakes people up every morning at 7.am and informs them what time it is. It lets them know how much time it will take to go somewhere they don’t know exactly. Sometimes they write lots of information in their cell phone like notebook. Some people argue that it irritates most people lives, because it interrupts normal lives of people. For example, when people concentrate on their really important missions or assignments, calling or text message disturb their nerves to indulge in. They know it is very annoyed situation. However cell phone can be turned off or be put in vibrate mode whenever they want, it cannot be a problem. Also, cell phone has numerous useful functions to cover its trivial nuisances.
A cell phone is very convenient and useful machine that affects people’s lives. It makes us contact to others easily and offers lots of functions which are necessary in our ordinary lives. I think it is desirable to be called as palm-size computer, if it has little deficiency. Therefore, I think a cell phone is the most essential and important invention that cause affection not only me, but also the people who have one.