Is the anyone who do not have a TV? Probably not. TV is one of the most famous invention in the world and also the most controversial in the world. This gives so much of benefits, but more disadvantages to children. That why some of the parents wants to remove the TV on their room for the children.
With the TV, the children can get the every information on the every world. Only turn on the TV at the room is have to do. This is very different from the past. Before the TV, the children is not easy to get a information because there's only newspaper that can give information and it is not easy to read for the children. But with the TV, children can easily get the information because it is the speaking with the visual, and visual is good for children to understand. But it is serious problem that the information is not always good. Most of the TV programs are not good. They are too sexual or violent. Also most of the informations are mostly prejudiced. Because of it is easy absorb the information, It can be used to put the thoughts that the media wants to. So children can easily biased and because of this, they are easily controlled by the media.
So that is why most of the parents hate the TV. Although it gives various information about all over the world but It can gives the children easy to be exposed by violent and sexual programs and also easy to be controlled by the media. That is why the TV is bad influence to the children.
1. What I like about this piece of writing is that I could read your essay easily. Everything is understandable.
ReplyDelete2. Your main point seems to be good and bad effects on TV
3. 'It can be used to put the thoughts that the media wants to' this line struck me as powerful, because Koean people call this 'media play' and I really agree about this.
4. I hope that you make sure of your opinion. I still don't know whether you agree on letting children watch TV or not.
What I like about this piece of writing is that you wrote easily so it is easy to follow your writings.
ReplyDeleteYour main point seems to be some bad effects of the TV to the children.
The sentence "ALso, most of the informations are mostly prejudiced." struck me because I strongly agree with this sentence. Because the programs are produced by the people, thier point of view never can be fair, I think.
Nothing was clear to me, but the one change you could make that would make the biggest improvement in this piece of writing is some grammatic problems. I can find some errors, so maybe you can fix them.
Thanks ^,^
Is the anyone who read this do not have a TV? Probably not. TV is one of the most famous invention in the world and also the most controversial material in the world. This gives so much of benefits, but more disadvantages to children. That is the reason why some of the parents wants to remove the TV on their room for the children.
ReplyDeleteWith the TV, the children can get the every information on the every world. Only turn on the TV at the room is have to do. This is very different from the past. Before the TV, the children is not easy to get a information because there's only newspaper that can give information and it is not easy to read for the children. But with the TV, children can easily get the information because it is the speaking with the visual, and visual is good for children to understand. But it is serious problem that the information is not always good. Most of the TV programs are not good. They are too sexual or violent. Also most of the informations are mostly prejudiced. Because of it is easy absorb the information, It can be used to put the thoughts that the media wants to. So children can easily biased and because of this, they are easily controlled by the media.
So that is why most of the parents hate the TV. Although it gives various information about all over the world but It can gives the children easy to be exposed by violent and sexual programs and also easy to be controlled by the media. That is why the TV is bad influence to the children. I also do not like to watch TV because their programs are mostly not interesting and funny. I can see their excessive behaviors make us to laugh, but not funny. So I really hate TV much.