When I was a child I was often sick. I used to spend more time at home then at school. There were times were I was so bored that I felt even worse. One day my father came home and said that he applied for an internet connection. From that day on a whole new world opened to me which changed my life. Lots of information was suddenly available to me with just a finger click away. Without doubt internet is in the top ten greatest inventions from the last 50 years.
Internet is a tool that partially helped to shape the world it is now. First of all, because of the internet, the speed of information sharing has become so fast that everyone can receive the same news at the same time. For example: Before the internet, when a war broke out in an exotic country, most people had to wait until the next day to be informed about it. Now with the internet everyone knows it a couple of hours later. Also, the internet made the world evolve quicker. Researchers, engineers, technicians, etc. from all over the world can work together in real-time because of the internet, which helps to the progress of humankind. Finally, internet brings different kinds of people together. Whether it is a student studying abroad contacting his or her parents, family or friends; or people who feel the need for someone to talk to through chatting. The internet makes it all possible. Of course, there will always be someone who says that the internet is a dangerous place because of hackers and that internet also causes anti-social behaviour with people who spend too much time on it. It would be wrong to say that those people are wrong. However, when putting the plusses and minuses together, I can't help thinking that the minuses of the internet are worth to keep using the internet. Considering all the cons and pros the internet has to offer, it would be wrong to forbid a great invention like the internet.
Internet is an invention that changed the world and it will keep changing it. Whether the changes will have a positive or negative outcome no one can tell. What I do know and can tell with certainty is that the internet has affected everyone's life and that no one can ignore its usefulness.
1. Does the essay have three paragraphs? Yes
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3. Is the writer's opinion about the issue clearly stated in the thesis statement? Yes
4. Does the body paragraph contain facts and reasons that support the opinion?
All reasons are good but I think if some more information about why the fact that the speed of information sharing has become so fast by the internet is good.
5. The sentence I agreed with: Without doubt internet is in the top ten greatest inventions from the last 50 years.
Because I can hardly find anything done without using the internet these days. The internet has become very essential and important to our lives.
6. Needs clarification or additional support: Whether the changes will have a positive or negative outcome no one can tell. What I do know and can tell with certainty is that the internet has affected everyone's life and that no one can ignore its usefulness.
Because I think it's too weak. In the latter sentence you do express the internet as useful. Considering this, I think you can be stronger on your positive prediction on effects of the internet.