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Jang Jiyun
There are two special celebrations in Korea that I hate. Those are the Valentine's Day and the White Day. On those days, Koreans exchange chocolates and candies respectively. Why I hate those? Because those days are the days for the couples! The true pleasure that we can feel on the Valentine's Day or the White Day, I think, comes from something that we received from the boyfriend or girlfriend. I don't have a boyfriend who would give me candy, so I can't feel true pleasure, and that's the reason why I hate two special celebrations. These two celebrations I hate have a lot of similarities like this and also, differences. I would like to tell you about those.
Above all, the Valentine's Day and the White Day are the days we can show our sense of love, friendship, respect by give someone chocolates and candies. Sometimes children give to parents, students give to teachers, but usually in Korea, young couples exchange those things. Valentine's Day and White Day are also on the 14th of the month. Valentine's Day is February 14th, and White Day is March 14th.
Valentine's Day and White Day have many differences as well. I heard that it is a little bit different from that of Korea, but there is Valentine's Day in other western countries as well. In contrast, there is no White Day in western countries. White Day is originated from the Japanese baking company's events on March 14th. It became famous in Japan, and it came to countries such as Korea and China. And White Day exists only in some Asian countries.
I have disliked those two days until now, but I really want to like those days. I hope I can make a boyfriend somehow by the next Valentine's Day and enjoy that day.
Valentine's day and a White day! I can feel your feeling before I read your writing. It was very interesting, and I also didn't feel the pleasure too. But it is not a four essay paragraph and your conclusion looks a bit short.
ReplyDelete1. Like you hate the Valentine's day and the White day, so do I.
ReplyDeleteThat is the most agreeable sentence in your essay.
2. Your essay is about the similarity and difference between Valentine's day and the White day.
3. I like the reason that you hate those days.
Also, it is interesting fact that White day is originated from Japan.
4. These two celebrations I hate have a lot of similarities like this and also, differnces.
-> Though I understand what you mean, I think it is little bit confused sentence.
These two celebrations I hate have a lot of similarities and differnces might be better.
5. If you add some words on you conclusion, it will make your essay better.