Jang Jun Hwa
200802967
Attack of the Boob Tube
Do you know gonggi, juibulnori, ddangddameokgi? These are the Korean traditional games which I used to play over 10 years ago. My friend and I played the games everyday after class. We was so hooked on them that we did not notice the time. Sometimes I want to see children play these kinds of games, but I can not. Why? I think children these days may watch the TV rather than play outside. Children are attacked by the boob tube!
In my opinion, TV always does more harm than good. First of all, TV is one of the major causes of obesity. Have you heard about couch potato syndrome? It is a set of behavior that some people spend most of their time watching TV, therefore they are getting fat. Andrew and Rachel wrote in their book, "One of the things which is sometimes held up as a cause of this(obesity) is the amount of time children now spend watching television…compared to dtoing more physical activities." There is no doubt that watching TV has a strong influence on obesity. In addition, watching too much TV can worsen children's school performance. According to the study conducted by Linda Pagani of the University of Montreal, children who watch television too much had more problems in school. Linda said, "High levels of TV consumption during this period can lead to future unhealthy habits," and she added, "In the classroom their teachers rate them as less persevering, less task-oriented and less autonomous." some people say educational programs are helpful for kids to get beneficial information. However, there are few educational programs which are appropriate for children. The research by Seoul YMCA shows that many Korean broadcasting companies organize children's programs no more than one hour a day. Furthermore, these programs are mostly trivial animations.
There are countless bad effects on children including being overweight and doing poorly at school. In spite of a lot of disadvantages, many children are exposed to TV everyday. In order to make kids get out from a swamp of TV, parents must encourage them not to watch TV and to find a new enjoyment.
by 200901051
ReplyDeleteFirst of all, in your titel and introduction you use the word boob tube. I had to look it up and found out that it was slang for television. Personally, I wouldn't use slang because A) non-native English speakers might have problems to understand the word, B) if the reader doesn't know the word boob tube, he or she might get the wrong impression when reading the title because of the word boob.
Secondly, in your second paragraph, who are Andrew and Ranchel? It's confusing. You might want to elaborate who they are like you did with Linda Pagani.
Your second paragraph does have strong points to support your opinion. Such as the research from Linda Pagani.
Your essay has also a refutation.