Tom and Tim, identical twins, are fairly good friend of mine. There is a general believe that identical twins have more or less an identical personality, but Tom and Tim are nothing like that. Although they show some similarities in their personality, they have also complete different personal traits.
When comparing the twins, both have a very social personality and both like to go out whenever they can. They have lots of friends and at the same time, they are also very popular amongst those friends. The brothers always get invited to parties and occasional festivals, which is always too big of a temptation to resist. So they always end up saying yes to the invitation. Not only do they often go out with their friends, both of them like to go somewhere on their own. Tom always go for a walk on his own and Tim prefers to go fishing on his own. When only considering the comparison between Tim and Tom, then people could indeed say that identical twins indeed have the same personality.
Although the two of them might be identical twins, they seem to have more things uncommon to each other than common. On the one hand, Tom is the non-academic type. He likes playing online games, football and above all he loves to sleep. Studying is the last thing in his mind that he wants to do voluntarily. On the other hand, Tim is the complete opposite of Tom. Tim is the more academic type. He loves studying, reading books and he's always interested in learning something new. Also, he hates any kind of physical exercise. Unlike his twin brother, Tim would do anything to avoid physical activity. Contrasting the two of them, could make someone wonder if identical twins really are that similar to each.
Tim and tom might be identical twins, but that doesn't mean that they have the same personality. They might have some similarities such as being very social and love to go out, but other personal characteristics clearly show that both of them also have completely different personal traits from each other. For example, Tom has a more active personality than Tim and Tim is more the bookworm type. Therefore, being identical twins doesn't mean that they are 100% similar to each other. Instead when the two of them are contrasted to each other, there are some clear distinctive differences to notice..
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Tom and Tim are identical twins who are fairly good friend of mine. They look identical, they dress almost identical and they prefer the same food. It’s as if they are two almost perfect copies from each other. Maybe that’s why there is a general believe that identical twins think and do things alike. However, when I think of their personality, I find it hard to believe that identical twins indeed think alike and do alike. Of course they do show some similar personality traits, but when I would believe the general believe about identical twins their personality and looking at Tom and Tim’s personality, I would never have guessed at they were identical twins.
If we believe that general believe and compare Tom and Tim’s personality, then the general believe should be true because both of them are very social and enjoy having a good time outside. They have lots of friends and both brothers also always get invited to parties and occasional festivals. Due to their social personality, it’s hard to resist for them and they always end up saying yes to the invitation. Of course on those parties too they show their social behavior because they always enjoy taking and meeting new people. However, the both brothers also enjoy having some time outside on their own. Tom always enjoys going for a stroll on his own and Tim prefers to go fishing on his own. Therefore when only considering the comparison between Tim and Tom, it should be true that identical twins have indeed a very similar personality.
Although their personalities show some similarities, they seem to have more things uncommon than common. They’re like black and white when it comes to their contrasts. On the one hand, Tom is the non-academic type. He loves playing online games, football and above all sleeping. Studying however, is the last thing in his mind that he would do on his own free time. Instead of studying he would rather go out and play football with his friends or go fishing on his own. On the other hand, Tim is the complete opposite of Tom. Tim is the more academic type. He loves studying, reading books from various fields and is always interested in learning something new that might improve his academic skills. Also, except for having a stroll, he hates physical exercise. Unlike his twin brother who loves sports, Tim would try to avoid physical activity as much as possible because he thinks it would keep him away from his studies. Seeing how they are also different from each other, it makes me wonder if the general believe might be wrong or Tim and Tom are an exceptional case.
The general believe might be that twins’ their personality is very alike, but that doesn’t mean that there are exceptions such as Tim and Tom. They have indeed some similarities such as being very social and easy going, but other personal characteristics clearly show that both of them also have completely different personal traits from each other. For example, Tom has a more active personality than Tim and Tim is more the bookworm type compared to Tom. Therefore, being identical twins doesn’t mean that twins are 100% similar to each other. Instead there will always be exceptional cases such as Tim and Tom.